I really liked the bit after the moderato section where it changed key. But I think you need more repitition with harmonies and the other stuff but less repitition with the melody. This is more of a classical piece than modern because rather than having a song you have more of a story which is very good, but it is very different to what we hear today. If you think of a melody and then think of all the stuff that can go with it it can be very effective. I also don't like having things that are not really good. What I mean is when you have parts that fill in between main parts and you don't think it through it sounds boring. So when you put something in between have something that is more of a melody than random notes. But I did like it but every piece can be improved by others opinions. Keep up the good work.

Try adding whole and half notes first to get the right harmonization and then mix and match with the quarter, eighth, and sixteenth notes. On page 2 measure one, use the French Horn or the Alto Sax to jump around instead of the Tuba. I usually keep the Tuba as a steady baseline. If I need a baseline to move around I use the Trombones or the Timpani.