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Polonaise in Bb, Feedback Wanted

I have been composing a polonaise in Bb for the past few days. The A section of the polonaise is what I have written down. The A section of the A section is what my first few questions are about and is the exclusively diatonic section. The B section of the A section is more chromatic. I am asking these questions because they came up to me after listening to my own polonaise a few times.

1) Is the bass in the A section of the A section(bars 1-8 and 23-30) too dense?

2) In the consequent phrase(bars 5-8), is the bass too close to the melody? Should I bring it down an octave?

3) In the B section of the A section(bars 9-22), am I handling my chromaticism correctly or not?
 
4) Is it too much of me to expect a pianist to play a polonaise rhythm in octaves for the whole B section of the A section?

5) Do I smoothly transition into the inversion(left hand becomes right hand kind of inversion) or not?
 
6) Is my A section too repetitive with 2 periods and a motive sandwiched between the 2 periods and the repeat sign?

7) Is 30 bars enough for the A section of a piece that I expect to be 200 or so bars long, or should I extend my A section further? 

Here is the link to my polonaise score:

https://musescore.com/user/50070/scores/5682039

How else do you think it could be improved? Right now, I'm thinking of what to put in the B section of my polonaise.

Thanks

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