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I just started composing (literally five minutes ago). I am very insecure, so there are only 2 lines and I already want feedback. I want this to be good, so all feedback (especially bad) is helpful!
https://flat.io/score/5dfff1f31492a87476498a7f-beautiful-river-valley?sharingKey=0082045e6edf214df8738d6142ff46172c76f3dc22576c1721cec62597d45c72e1f3773667ec68e35de5e9980c8dcdf6e0416aabf94175aea21d9be8857a6204

Nocturne in Eb arrangement, feedback

This is the first time that I have arranged a Chopin piece. Not only that, but it is the first Chopin piece I ever played, so I am very familiar with this piece. I know, I need a countermelody or something along those lines for the first violin. But there is a bit of a problem stopping me from doing this. That is just how close the second violin  gets in pitch to the flute.

Typically, there is less than an octave of space between the second violin and the flute in any given beat. That doesn't allow for many countermelody notes if I want to keep things relatively consonant. And of course I want to keep things relatively  consonant because of the beautiful melody in the flute. I also don't want to have the countermelody have so many short notes that it becomes the main melody. The flute is playing the main melody and I don't want  to underwhelm that(I already get close to that with some of the forte dynamics).

There are no slurs in what I have written, mainly because the phrasing of the bass line is super clear just from the notation and, I have no idea where a flutist would take a breath. I can only barely get the first and second octaves to sound right, still doing that C major octave scale exercise and the staccato exercise on my flute. And this is after more than a month of flute practice, so while I technically can play  melodies on the flute at this point, I am limited to legato melodies with short phrasing that aren't super elaborate.

What do you think of my arrangement of Chopin's Nocturne in Eb?

https://musescore.com/user/50070/scores/5895090 

Nocturne in Eb arrangement, feedback

This is the first time that I have arranged a Chopin piece. Not only that, but it is the first Chopin piece I ever played, so I am very familiar with this piece. I know, I need a countermelody or something along those lines for the first violin. But there is a bit of a problem stopping me from doing this. That is just how close the second violin  gets in pitch to the flute. 

Typically, there is less than an octave of space between the second violin and the flute in any given beat. That doesn't allow for many countermelody notes if I want to keep things relatively consonant. And of course I want to keep things relatively  consonant because of the beautiful melody in the flute. I also don't want to have the countermelody have so many short notes that it becomes the main melody. The flute is playing the main melody and I don't want  to underwhelm that(I already get close to that with some of the forte dynamics). 

There are no slurs in what I have written, mainly because the phrasing of the bass line is super clear just from the notation and, I have no idea where a flutist would take a breath. I can only barely get the first and second octaves to sound right, still doing that C major octave scale exercise and the staccato exercise on my flute. And this is after more than a month of flute practice, so while I technically can play  melodies on the flute at this point, I am limited to legato melodies with short phrasing that aren't super elaborate. 

What do you think of my arrangement of Chopin's Nocturne in Eb? 

https://musescore.com/user/50070/scores/5895090

Struggling

So I want to learn how to play the song Into The Unknown from Frozen 2, and I found most of the notes and I'm trying my best to compose my own version of it, because I can't find a flute solo for it anywhere. There's a part where it goes "ah ah ah ah" in a really high pitched note, but I can't find or figure out what notes they are! So if you know what notes they are or you know a place where I can get the song in a flute solo version, please let me know.