Constructive criticism for my composition

I would greatly appreciate any critique yall have for this composition.  As an amateur composer looking to improve, its nice when people tell you it sounds good, but the only way to improve is to understand where you fell short and what you can do better.  Please be constructive and don't simply say "I don't like it" because that gives me nothing to work with.  In the description I include a link to a Youtube video with audio of me actually performing it.  I thought that would be better than a synthesized recording.  Thank you guys a bunch!

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24 days ago

Score advice

I don't mind listening to anyone's music and giving comments and critique, so if anyone wants me to listen just let me know!

BTW I'd appreciate it if anyone could give some feedback on mine XD

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4 months ago